Wikipedia:Peer review/Disgaea/archive1
Disgaea[edit]
I've been working on this article for quite some time. I'd like to eventually send it to featured article candidates and would appreciate any relevant feedback. - RedWordSmith 01:41, Feb 15, 2005 (UTC)
- I love the fact that I can stumble over new stuff every day here on Wikipedia ;) Overall, good article, but I noticed a few things:
- The sections 'Gameplay features' and 'Characthers' are bulleted lists... which I'm personly ain't too keen on. Would it be possible to turn it into 'proper' sentences and paragraphs instead? I think that would make it easier to read.
- Part of the article - in particular the section 'Gameplay features' reads like an advertisment blurb. Again, turning it into 'proper' sentences and paragraph might help, as well as a carefull rewording.
- I'm looking forward to seeing how this turns out after PR. WegianWarrior 08:42, 15 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- I've had a stab at "De-listing" the Gameplay features section. What do you think of it now? Has the change in format made it seem less like an ad? - RedWordSmith 04:26, Feb 17, 2005 (UTC)
- Looks - and reads - much better. I think part of the reason I felt it rad like an ad was the format used (bulleted list).WegianWarrior 10:17, 17 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- I've had a stab at "De-listing" the Gameplay features section. What do you think of it now? Has the change in format made it seem less like an ad? - RedWordSmith 04:26, Feb 17, 2005 (UTC)