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Happy to review this. ceranthor 17:39, 10 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
Might be better to get rid of the infobox for this article.
"Salar de Coipasa." - worth briefly clarifying this is a lake
"The volcanic activity " - I'd remove "the" here
"edifice has been constructed by andesitic rocks" - I've been told to replace "constructed" before for anthropomorphic connotations; what do you think about using "created" or "produced by" instead?
"The southern flank of Tata Sabaya failed" - maybe a better link here would be mass wasting?
" during the latest Pleistocene " - latest Pleistocene?
"Subsequently the collapse scar was partly filled in with more recent lava flows and lava domes; one eruption occurred about 6,000 years before present." - was this the last eruption? If not, this last bit might be irrelevant
Not sure about the infobox. Used "formed", "created" and "produced by" has the same anthropomorphic connotations IMO. "Latest Pleistocene" is a common word for "between 100,000 and 10,000 (Holocene) years ago". We don't know whether there was one or more eruptions after the collapse, probably more than one though. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Geography and geomorphology
"The volcano is a topic in local myths, where it is sometimes personified.[6]" - any elaboration on how it's personified?
"Tata Sabaya is a mountain which reaches a height of 5,430 metres (17,810 ft).[8][1]" - is it worth stating that it's "a mountain" when you've previously clarified it's a volcano? Seems redundant. Also switch [8] and [1] in order here
"Five lava flows extend north from the summit and display levees and flow fronts, the flows reaching a maximum length of 2 kilometres (1.2 mi); the top of these flows is cut by a collapse scar that extends east and west of the edifice in the form of scarps up to 50 metres (160 ft) high.[9]" - break up into more than one sentence
Link hummock
Would it be possible to increase the size of images in the gallery?
Not sure how to word an explanation of the personification; apparently Tata Sabaya may be the father of a certain "Capurata". Got the others. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Geology
"Based on research several phases of tectonic and volcanic activity have been identified in the Central Volcanic Zone." - not sure what "based on research" adds here, I think that's implied
Link Porphyritic
Clarify what mafic means (parenthetical should be fine)
Quantitative estimates or averages available at all?
I don't think so. Tata Sabaya like most Bolivian volcanoes is very poorly studied. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Eruption history
" The young age of the mountain has been inferred from the lack of moraines[8] and glaciation on the mountain, " - might make logical sense to switch glaciation and moraines, since glaciers precede moraines? Just a thought
Think you want a different link for fallout, not nuclear fallout :)
Got the first. For whatever reason, we only have an article for the nuclear version. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Everything in the gallery is definitely CC? Does the journal clarify this somewhere on its website? (I can read Spanish fairly well)
At the bottom of the page it says Todo el contenido de esta revista, excepto dónde está identificado, está bajo una Licencia Creative Commons with a link to this permitted license and no indication that these images are exempted. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
good work. Should be easy to fix these concerns. ceranthor 17:49, 15 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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